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前两天写了一篇作文发到太傻上，想请牛人帮忙改一下，可是到现在一个回复都没有想问问大家写完一篇作文通常怎么办呢？ --谢谢之前大家的回复，能有人帮忙看看这篇作文吗？第一次写，想知道有什么不足，以后好找对方向去努力 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Getting university education is the most important factor for success in life. As more and more college students end up with unemployment and failure in their later life after college education, people have demonstrated an increasing concern for the significance of university education to success. Some people assume that the college education to success is what the foundation to a skyscaper. They argue that without educational experience in university, no one could realise his dream. While on the other hand, some people insist that getting educated is only one source, among thousands of others, to success. As far as I am concerned, everyone has his own way to achieve his life goal. Although sometimes college education is essential to success, social education can, from time to time, play a more crucial role. People can never exagertate the improtantance of social lessons to one’s entire life. We may cite a single example of Li Jiacheng, who is the most richest person in China.When LI was young, he only getted 3 years of education in primary school since his family couldn’t afford his tuition. Without the failure and the obstacles, which taught him how to be a run business and be a candid man, he wouldn’t achive his dream. So it is obvious that the social experiences contributed more to Li Jiacheng’s success than school education did. To the already familiar facts ,abundant future evidence may be added.Even thougn thousands of people got enducated in university in the past, only a few made their dream come true in their later life. Why? As the old saying goes “ A man’s character shape his fortune.” An enumorous number of students who get university credit end up as ordinary people in his future life. Perhaps most of them have their dream when they were young, but as time went by they gave up and became ordinary people. On the other hand, Bill Gates, who dropped out of Harvard in Grade Two to pursue his dream, setted up his own business and finally became a giant in sofware field. Being successful hinges on your persistance to your dream. Getting educated in university did help shape one’s density in one way or another. Teachers will teach you new knowledge and how to handle difficulties in your life; classmates will help you with your homework and problems; research that you involved in will broaden your view. However, this doesn’t mean that it is the most important factor to one’s success. From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that getting educated in college doesn’t mean success and no university education doesn’t mean failure in one’s later life. The most important is what you do now and what you will do in the future. From my perspective, your density is within your own hand not determined by college education.

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